Please God (Make It Stop)

Please god make it stop;

All the hurting, the lying, the running.

Please god make it stop;

All the misery, the pain, the crying.

How many more days can I go on?

Please god make it stop;

All the sadness, the hiding, the madness.

How much more can a man take?

Please god make it stop,

Please god make it stop,

Please god make it stop,

Please god make it stop,

Please god make it stop...

Maybe then I'll learn why I pray.

Please god make it stop,

Please god make it stop,

Please god make it stop!

 

Jarred Shah

8/22/2020

4:35pm

This poem is about: 
Me
Our world

Comments

devoter786

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devoter786

I like your poem, and the messsage you are trying to send is very relevant to our times right now. If you don't mind criticism, I think you can better your poem by adding more descriptions about your emotions, as emotions help the audience/reader visualize what the author is trying to say. Just my two cents!

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