Ones, Oh's and seeds

Sat, 10/13/2012 - 00:41 -- amp358

Location

01108
United States
42° 5' 13.812" N, 72° 33' 42.8004" W
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like the word wealth
my true nature is hidden
behind
Digital image or lyrical gimmicks
The fiddler collects winnings
when the starved jack pots
though
ein
by
jeden
my fields of green
crack through the concrete of concept
my mind multiplies many till
Eden

Comments

jwiener

12 years ago

I love the structure of this poem, and how you only chose to capitalize a few words. This really shows the reader the importance of certain parts of the poem. My favorite line is "crack through the concrete of concept" because of the alliteration you used. Nice techniques!

amp358

12 years ago

Its a great feeling when someone notices your work, I appreciate it :)

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