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Sarah Myer
Very good. I loved the amount of questioning and emotion you captured in so few words.
The Little Prince
You have a way with words. I confess, I do not quite understand the lines: "When truth is told and eyes don't meet,/And kindness held a heavy feat." (My lack of understanding is at that last part) But the rest is very good. This talks very well about not just habit, but insincerity. When does love become nothing more than a word? It sounds like the problem here isn't just with routine, but that the heart, the emotion, the meaning, the sheer power behind it---is gone. "I love you" without the meaning behind it is nothing more than an empty shell of something once beautiful. It's like the cocoon after the butterfly has left. In any case (sorry for rambling), I enjoyed it! Thank you for writing!
Amyyschu
Thank you for all the feedback on several poems of mine...:) "When truth is told and eyes don't meet" speaks of being honest but the other person being so untrusting that you might as well be lying. The second part may have been worded better, I admit, but in less poetic words it could be stated or explained: "when being kind is difficult becuse the person recieving the kindess is not easy to get along with" Thank you!
AlicatWrites
Beautiful! I like the rhym.