Redo

Location

20841
United States
39° 11' 39.6348" N, 77° 19' 15.4416" W

If there was a “do over”,
No “game over” it meant
Nothing change I would
For I love who I am.
“What if” is a childish game
Of my little-chicken self.

Having a normal life,
With my father beside,
Used to be a wish,
I prayed every night.

But let assume it’s real.
In my “do over”,
I’ll have a father
With great memories:
He’ll teach me to talk;
He’ll walk me to school;
He’ll play me in pool.

That would be so cool!
Yet, here’s the trade –off:
The thought that I got
From fighting alone
Be strong I was taught
Plus wonderful moms I got
In school, in church, and at home

And that’s why I stop
Considering my “do over”.
For I love what I’ve made myself up
From not having a father:
A gentle and responsible man.

Guide that inspired this poem: 

Comments

vongtruong1702

Hello everyone, please feel free to tear this poem apart because I am not a native speaker, and I am trying to get as many constructive feedbacks as possible.

Additional Resources

Get AI Feedback on your poem

Interested in feedback on your poem? Try our AI Feedback tool.
 

 

If You Need Support

If you ever need help or support, we trust CrisisTextline.org for people dealing with depression. Text HOME to 741741