humble beginnings

Location

10458
United States
40° 51' 43.8444" N, 73° 53' 9.636" W

gratefully appreciative
humbly spectating my friends sery, tato, prisionera, and jorge (georgie) take initiative
as they perform their poems on stage
express their poems with no fear nor rage
assert their passion with love, fire, and emotion more genuine than someone stealing a line from a page
as i watch them perform, i became more intuitive of embracing poetry of all form
to some viewers, it may be consider not the typical norm
they were not afraid
they perform not because of the paid
it was for the moment
it was that time to showcase their talent
that was when it dawned on me
to have that opportunity to let me be
let all viewers one day see
when my time comes to perform, my poems are so genuinely heartfelt that people won't flee
i thank my fellow poets in embracing the art that's poetic
my words of meaning will impact lives that's floetic
never believe in wasting anyone's time
i say what i mean, i mean what i say that is worth more than three nickels and a single dime
it is even more empowering to see my boricua poets speak
overrides societies perception of Spanish people being a sneak

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Comments

Naijabyblood

I give you credit for trying, but the overuse of rhyme diluted the poem and made the poem okay instead of outstanding. Keep going you have some things to work on.

MVP-Most Valuable Poet

1st off, poems come in many forms and styles
my overuse of rhyme doesn't dilute the poem itself, it gives a powerful message to viewers
perhaps , you should read it again, and make a better assessment
poems is very universal, keep that in mind
may not relate to you, relates to other poets

MVP-Most Valuable Poet

this is a poem about fellow poets who inspired me to be great
to never be afraid to express myself
i thank them for that

marie

Hey Naijabyblood, constructive criticism is good, but PP is not the place to discourage other poets' writings. We support every poet, at every stage of expertise.

Velezjrobert: your work and drive continue to inspire me. I'd love to see you submit a video poem--maybe of you performing a piece, or even just a voice over to camera shots.

MVP-Most Valuable Poet

marie-thank you for having my back-i'm humbly appreciative of it
just want ot make it clear that i'm not discouraged in any way, if anything, i'm even inspire to be greater when you have those that try to bring me down
everybody is entitle to one's opinion, but people must truly understand that there is no one style of poem

marie-check out my other poems and tell me what you think
and once again-thanks 4 having my back

poeticmindset7

Simply inspiring . Thank you, for allowing me to understand as you do

MVP-Most Valuable Poet

thank you for reading my poem and showing love
check out my other poems my brother
i'm always writing

Eunoia

I like how you span of vocabulary, it's fun play on the tongue. I like it, keep it up!

MVP-Most Valuable Poet

im just getting started lol
ty 4 your love and support
check out my other poems

Grant-Grey Porter Hawk Guda

Powerful expression! 

MVP-Most Valuable Poet

thanks for the support

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