Whirlwind

Sun, 09/01/2013 - 18:46 -- xavir

Starring into the murky stream

I reminince how life's gone by

and feel the searing loss when my brothers life flew by

a second later an ice cold fury

paralyses me as i realize how much people

assume to know me, criticize, and judge me...

in the end i dont care

because i wont bend no matter how other people fare.

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xavir

how can i do better?

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