The Weight of the World

The weight of the World is crashing down
 
And it seems like there no one but me aroun'
 
The  weight of the World hurts
 
Causing us to kick up dirt
 
The weight of the World is heavy
 
One that can't stay steady
 
The wieght of the World wonders
 
So why don't we plunder
 
The weight of the World won't change
 
Its something that's strange
 
The weight of the World is self owned
 
Something that causes our minds to be blowned

Comments

RebeccaYSPerez

Oh look at that! You have an 82.9% similarity with Lewis Carroll! He's my favorite! I'm not sure if it was intentional, but the last word should be blown- since that is already the past tense of the word blow. I really liked the rhyming and the patterns within the piece, it's musical almost.

Thank you for sharing this,
Rebecca

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