the snow was falling

Thu, 07/26/2012 - 22:54 -- mimi

The snow was falling
when we went out to play
Up and down the hill side.

The snow was flaky
when we shouted and fought
Up and down the hill side.

The snow was cold
when we slid on our skateboards
Up and down the hill side.

The snow was white
when we went out to play
Up and down the hillside.

Comments

mimi

the poem is about weather

mimi

the poem is about weather (snow)

jwiener

This poem reminded me of when I was young and would play in the snow for hours. I enjoyed how you made each stanza of the poem begin with "the snow" because it kept the focus on the weather in the story.

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