A Path to Despair

 

A Path to Despair



Walking through the streets side by side,

your body there, but your mind not.

I stop and I stare as you walk on,

Only to find that you forgot

O show me the truth!



How can I believe,

when you say you deeply care

How can I trust,

when you’ll actually be there

O show me the truth!



Your words are those of flaming hot steel,

questioning my mind to ask what is real.

But Its not what you say, it’s the things you do

that lets me see the fraud in you.

O show me the truth!



Do you assume that I omit,

that one memory of you having split

me waiting a countless number of  hours,

only to see that you didnt even bring flowers.

O show me the truth!



Did I need to remind you of that special day,

our anniversary, that one that led us astray

And after that, I began to pray

only to find that you ran away.

O show me the truth!



The glimmering lights shine,

when the true self comes in line

and thats when I noticed that you had not a care,

to know if I was ever in despair.

O show me the truth!



Connection

This poem is thematically related to John Keats’ “You Say You Love”. In Keats poem, one of the major themes was, love that is shown in actions as well as words is stronger than love that is expressed, only through words. Throughout Keats’ whole poem, he complains about how his lover expresses her love only through words and he doubts if her love is true. My poem parallels Keats poem by stating that without actions love is not real. In my poem, a woman expresses her pain about the way her lover is absentmindedly demolishing her love life. She questions his commitment in the relationship due to the way he acts. Just like in Keats poem, I have also inserted a repetitive last sentence in each stanza emphasizing this woman’s pain. I believe that this last sentence adds more flavor into my writing and gets the reader engaged into poem. John Keats uses the rhyme scheme ABCBD, while I started off with that rhyme scheme and moved my way into couplets. I did this to emphasize the change in emotions throughout the poem. My poem is intentionally referring to the same topic as John Keats poem to show that nothing has changed from his time period, up until now. In both, Keats time period and our time period actions have been proven to show more depth into a connection or a conversation and that is why there is are sayings like, “Show, Don’t Tell ” and, “Actions speak louder than words”. Both Keats and my poem are based off of these cliches.

 
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