My mistake by Partiv Jaswani

I was so excited

It was a day where I would get my puppy

I got home and saw him for the first time

I thought about all the things we could do together

Play football, go for walks, meet other dogs

 

He smiled at me, but little did I know he was planning to bite me

I screamed at the top of my lungs “ Holy moly!! Son of a gun”

And so he bit and bit unable to quit he spit out my hand

 

And he went for my pillow

So I got the mango and brought it to him

And managed to tame the lone wolf

 

Oh Whooper oh Whooper

The pillow got torn before I got to him

I knew I was in trouble, I ran to hide in my “bubble”

 

And scattered like a bastard

But at the end of the day

I am always still excited to see him

And do this all over again

 

This poem is about: 
Me

Comments

Meta4Man55

Love the internal rhyme of "bit" and "quit" - manages to be effective and amusing!

Meta4Man55

I also like the ambiguity of "scattered like a bastard" - referring to the puppy or the mess he made?

partivjaswani1

When I said this, I was referring to the mess that he usually makes and the action he does after the mess he has made, which is scatter away like a bastard.

Purav

I think that this poem was great, as you used good techniques. This poem was also really creative and pretty funny. It was also a great idea as you did it about your dog. The two techniques I've seen so far is repetition and rhyming. Repetition is used when you repeat bit and rhyming is used when you said bit, quit and spit.

 

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