My mistake by Partiv Jaswani
I was so excited
It was a day where I would get my puppy
I got home and saw him for the first time
I thought about all the things we could do together
Play football, go for walks, meet other dogs
He smiled at me, but little did I know he was planning to bite me
I screamed at the top of my lungs “ Holy moly!! Son of a gun”
And so he bit and bit unable to quit he spit out my hand
And he went for my pillow
So I got the mango and brought it to him
And managed to tame the lone wolf
Oh Whooper oh Whooper
The pillow got torn before I got to him
I knew I was in trouble, I ran to hide in my “bubble”
And scattered like a bastard
But at the end of the day
I am always still excited to see him
And do this all over again
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Meta4Man55
Love the internal rhyme of "bit" and "quit" - manages to be effective and amusing!
Meta4Man55
I also like the ambiguity of "scattered like a bastard" - referring to the puppy or the mess he made?
Purav
I think that this poem was great, as you used good techniques. This poem was also really creative and pretty funny. It was also a great idea as you did it about your dog. The two techniques I've seen so far is repetition and rhyming. Repetition is used when you repeat bit and rhyming is used when you said bit, quit and spit.