Love 16

Let my love fall down

In your heart

Let it sway in the wind

And dance within

I don't want it to hurt anymore

Let alone myself

Don't let it burn

I've taken the bullet for you

All I ask

Is that you hold my hand

 

Comments

natalierodriguez

I did not upload this... i dont know why it appeared
This is a nice poem though

Neeco_Beltran

thanks!

 

Kodatsumaego

This is interesting. It is short but it is interesting... I can't quite put my finger on it.

In my humble opinion, I think you make a few contradictory statements, but they work. That is the beauty of this poem. It is simple. Yet is is complex. I think it clearly demonstrates how you must have been feeling in that moment. 

I like it. :) Thanks for sharing. :)

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