Fairies

Tue, 12/10/2024 - 11:52 -- Vivin

Im not hungry but food cannot get into my mouth fast enough 

Brusied knuckles, never have I been so pretty

Baby ask me what its like to taste ash

Sovereignty over me, please, im not even hungry

Knocked knees, do I have the strength to walk home?

What waits for me behind that door?

Slice my achilles, i've become too weak 

Running through the harrowed nights

Crucify me, im not even similar to those fairies

Dont they know how envious I am

Clenching fists to a softened rib

Where did my youth go?

Smiled at the stars and all they did was spit back at me

Never did I deserve this

I wonder

 

Comments

cecilymock

Your visceral imagery and raw confessional style reminds me of Anne Sexton's fearless approach to personal trauma, particularly in poems like "The Fury of Overeating." The juxtaposition of physical details ("bruised knuckles," "knocked knees") with celestial imagery ("smiled at the stars") creates a powerful tension similar to Sylvia Plath's work. Your recurring food imagery combined with religious references ("crucify me") speaks to both bodily and spiritual hunger in a way that echoes Marie Howe's exploration of the sacred in the suffering. The final lines' movement from accusation to uncertainty ("Never did I deserve this / I wonder") shows sophisticated emotional complexity. Keep developing this brave voice that speaks truth to pain - your ability to transform personal struggle into universal experience is remarkable. If you need support, text HOME to 741741.

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