Completing Suicide

I’m abandoned.
I’m left alone in the dark and cold.
No one is here to keep me warm.
Who am I to trust?
Who will betray me?
Who loves me?
Who hates me?
I want to rip my heart out,
And make the pain bleed away.
Suicide seems like heavenly punishment,
But I tortured myself everyday by living.
You have no idea how horrible it is to live when you yearn for death.
So I sealed my heart in a cage, but the dark ravages.
The cage breaks revealing the dark, but I regain control once more.
And my cage becomes strong with each new battle.
~~~the eternal battle~~~

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samueltfranklin

A brutal, short poem bereft of any frivolousness--short and evocative, cutting to the point. You have a true gift of sparseness of words, and you use that here to strong effect. Check out a poem named "In the Desert" by Stephen Crane--I think you'd enjoy it.

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