clouded

fog clouds the morning air,
smoke clouds the eyes,
and cold steel clouds my judgment.
is there a time when fog lifts,
is there a time when smoke fades,
is there a time when the thoughts disappear.
unlike fog and smoke steel is solid,
always infront of me,
unable to be forgotten.
How did this happen to me,
how did a blade take over my life,
how could steel cloud my judgment.
with my path clouded by fog,
my eyes filled with smoke,
and the blade in hand, i stand quietly.
i may not be able to see the ground infro of me,
or the air past the smoke,
but i can see my future, and the blade wont last.
i may not be able to control the fog,
or the smoke filled air,
but i can control my own head.
I seperate myself from the steel,
and wait for another challenge to arise,
because my head is no longer clouded.

Comments

jwiener

Writing stories is part of writing poetry, and you write a clear story with this poem, since it has a beginning, middle, and end. The tone shifts from being dark and distracted to being confident and seeing clearly which really adds to the personality of the poem. You are a great writer!

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