Closeted Confusion

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His fate was obscure like broken crystal.

The shore of shards carved his existence,

ambiguous like the grim sky's thunder.

No more does the loving lark sing,

for the sinister caws of the crows swell.

 

Sand like snakes slither to the sea.

Piercing—bleeding from tearful terror.

The man advances to the tide:

confused, dazed, puzzled.

 

Unveiling its tears, the sky still rumbles,

to conceal the charm of true love's absence.

Amid the clouds, the moon shines through;

the beach reflecting its ghastly glow.

 

A gusting breeze chilled his freezing thoughts,

leaving him senseless and numb.

What was there to do?

Hope, integrity, and optimism ceased to exist,

like a dampened paint brush stroking across the ocean.

 

Amidst the horizon, an island lay—full of life.

 

© 2009, Brandon Robert. 

 

Comments

Eunoia

You poem makes me tingle..... ahhhhh

Lydia Pandorf

It was a great poem that leaded to a terrific ending! 

TheFraiz

Great alliteration and use of discriptive words to provide a vivid image. 

BranRobwrites

Thank you so much, I'm very happy you picked up on that. Details in writing are very crucial to me. Very much appreciated!!

RachelOrtega

You really should write more poems. I would LOVE to read more of your work!

BranRobwrites

Thank you Rachel, I actually have lots of poems written and working on a novel that will be completed November 20th. If you would like more infor, let me know!!! I appreciate your kind words. They are significantly special. 

annapinault

The ending is so very beautiful. There's so much verbage to take in and digest, and it gets your brain swirling, and then all of a sudden you see what is being painted. It's life! It's right in front of your eyes. 

Peter Rico

Your imagery is astounding.

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