After Tonight

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75229
United States
32° 53' 44.9808" N, 96° 52' 21.468" W

After tonight, I will never cry for you again.
After tonight, I will never try to forgive you again.
After tonight, I will never love you again.
After tonight, I will never long for you again.
After tonight, I will never plead your case again.
But just for tonight I will, again.
Just once more, to remember that pain;
That love; that brokenness. Bitter sweet;
Sharp in my mind.
Like the pain my razor brings,
Masked in pain.
I will remember, just this one night.

Comments

samueltfranklin

The strong anaphora of the first five lines is cut suddenly by a deviation from that form, as well as a deviation from the action being taken: the strong iterations of what you won't do is undermined by the single admission of what you will do. The image of a razor brings a bite of physical pain along with the emotional pain implied throughout, but is not a good solution, as the poem suggests: it is only for one night. Any more than that would be detrimental to the healing process--prolonging the pain does not make it go away.

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