Creep

Sun, 11/20/2011 - 19:23 -- ppadmin

As the time stops my heart begins to race and my jaw drops and I begin to think at a faster pace and If I hear something that’s not really there I begin to think I do care if he finds out about us Yet it seems like the world never ends between you and me And as we creep creep i get to see how much you mean to me. And as I creep with you it seems like even the concrete creeps beneath my feet but yet it seems but yet is seems only to me

Comments

jwiener

This poem tells a great story, and your use of repetition throughout of "creep" and "yet it seems" is a nice way for you to make sure the reader/listener understands what you are trying to say.

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