With You

Tears dropping within its flow.

Tears being wept on a pillow.

Hey you, don't just stand on a cue

because I'm with you.

 

Broken hearts, broken dreams

we are not perfect, life ain't like ice creams.

Don't feel blue

because I'm with you.

 

Turn around and close that door

because past is past, and it's not there no more.

Leave them behind, leave with no clue

because I'm with you. 

Comments

RebeccaYSPerez

This poem is definitely something very beautiful, it's repetition is very reassuring, and powerful. It touches on heartaches, and sadness, and it definitely touches on the fact that there is still someone there for you through this time. My favorite line would have to be "Past is par, and it's not there no more." (Even though it's a double negative, it's a beautiful line, don't change it! Creative license!)

Thank you for sharing!

Rebecca

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