Taken

Drown me with love and fill me with passion,

Alone in that tower how good it felt.

The night that we shared we not old fashioned,

Such overwhelming love it made me melt.

Your body was glorios like shiny gold,

Your kiddes so wam, gentle and oh so sweet.

Together, forever young until old.

Hearing your voice always felt like a treat.

Yet now you are gone and I am troubled,

In the hands of another my heart screams.

You left me for her, my pain is doubled.

You are no longer a part of my dreams.

Goodbye for now my one and only love,

Maybe together again up above.

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bvpoet2014

Everyone has gone through the pains of a broken heart. For the purpose of truly illuminating the idea that every relationship has an imperfection, I chose to twist the rhythm of the meter. I stayed away from the idea of an iambic pentameter, a quirk that can only be found if one were to sit down and fully scrutinize the stressed and unstressed syllables in each line. Much like the form of this love sonnet, the message that is trying to be portrayed is one of pain but success as well. The character discovers that what she had felt was a perfect relationship was really nothing worth her time. She discovered a flaw in her relationship and after seeing her ex with another women and flashing back to their old relationship she realizes that it wasn’t truly meant to be. The true message of this sonnet was that relationships all have their imperfections but they are not really discovered unless you take the time to look at the relationship and truly scrutinize it; much like what you have to do to discover that this sonnet does not follow the rules of iambic pentameter. 

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