On a Rainy Day

Sat, 04/26/2014 - 14:58 -- Loi-Boy

 

The effervescence in all adolescents is headed in the wrong directions. 
 
The rock is eroded for another season. 
 
My peers' belief of inadequacy in themselves has lost their chance to take opportunities.  
 
The rock is eroded for another season. 
 
My knowledge is judged by my age because my peers are filled with ignorance. 
 
The rock is eroded for another season. 
 
My knowledge is judged based on my race as a Mexican. 
 
The rock is eroded for another season. 
 
People in this world need to start wars to finally see we are all the same by the way 
we bleed. 
 
The rock is eroded for another season. 

Comments

Angelwith1wing

Wow. Great poem. The repetition really draws the reader into the poem. Keep writing on my friend. 

powerful.imani

SPEECHLESS BECAUSE THAT POEM WAS SO DEEP !!!

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