My life

(Author’s notes: A poem that came to me at 15/16 years old., then revised.

The dash is a beat and the ellipsis is a long pause.)

My life isn’t as bad as it seems,

that even in the darkness there are beams,

Of light that shine through.

 

And yet I spiral into a vortex of depression,

Like the recession of an economy.

 

I don’t call it depression.

Hell No!

That would be like a blow in my entrails.

A pain, I fear. So sharp that:

it would drag my soul so low

and so close to the edge of …

Nothingness!

 

Somehow in my screwed-up head,

Acknowledging it is equivalent to a failure.

 

So I hold my resistance,

And ignore the existence,

Of that phantom word that I try so hard to erase.

Or at least to fade into the haze,

Of a thousand other words.

 

From the moment I was born,

I’ve always been a fighter.

But piece by piece, I am torn,

By a black whole we call life.

 

It’s like I’m trapped in a whirlpool of: ‘I don’t know,

who I am, what to do or where to go’?

 

My feelings are like the past of alphabet soup,

So confused that I am stuck in a loop,

Of destruction.

 

When I’m alone my face is a perfect reflection,

Of the conflict that is going through my head.

So even in the delusion,

I am led to the conclusion,

That there must be something wrong with - me.

 

The Lights start to dim,

the gleam of hope fades.

My life passes me by in a constant routine.

 Now that I am eighteen

 I grasp onto consciousness,

Realizing and felling like I’m not as happy as I seem.

 

At 21 I look back,

At those dark day I had.

I am glad I am now on track,

To a better life and a better place.

 

-- By Aurora Ejikeme

This poem is about: 
Me
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Comments

Rora Ejikeme

Dear Sir/Madam, I would like some constuctive critism, to improve my poetry writting. Thank you.

-- Kind regards Aurora Ejikeme

Annette M Velasquez

Your poem is emotionally riveting and the use of metaphor and description skillful. In the introduction, "author" and " revise" are misspelled. But even experienced writers do this, the use of spell check will correct it. The poem itself is flawless grammatically, and in terms of spelling. Your message is powerful and the images are vivid, the rhymes unique and " different" in a refreshing way.

Rora Ejikeme

Dear Annette M. Velasquez, I hope you are well. Thank you for the feed back and the compliment. I have corrected the spelling mistakes, but I am glad there weren't that many spelling mistakes. This helps me know whether or not my poems matter (emotionally) or no. Thank you and have a good day!

-- Kind Regard, Aurora Ejikeme

Rora Ejikeme

Dear Annette M. Velasquez, I hope you are well. Thank you for the feed back and the compliment. I have corrected the spelling mistakes, but I am glad there weren't that many spelling mistakes. This helps me know whether or not my poems matter (emotionally) or no. Thank you and have a good day!

-- Kind Regard, Aurora Ejikeme

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