I appreciate your honesty. This poem seems to be a true reflection of your raw emotions-- no fluff-- and that makes this a wonderful poem.

However, when you write about issues that may not be as personal, using the plethora of writing tools at your disposal will give your message much more meaning. I recommend that you begin by practicing writing a few poems with a consistent rhyming pattern or begin thinking of different ways to say the same thing.

Here's an example: "I love you" vs. "If I was the world, you'd be my gravity" or "They must hate me" vs. "I'm the target of their bullets".

Finding different methods of expression lightens the load of our stresses in life and can be therapeutic.

Never-the-less, I love the sincerity and integrity in your writing style.

Thank you for sharing!