love ,sex and facebook

Thu, 09/19/2013 - 15:42 -- terisa

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Yes! Yes! He accept my friend request

I could remember the joy that filled my soul

It was so much it leak like snat coming through my nose

my heart was like the prime minister on Election Day

Singing victory, victory we will rise all d way

Because you see he

He was the best

He was most definitely better than the rest

His profile pic makes my spine intermingle with my intestine

Make my liver start to shiver, which had my body moving like the Michael Jackson thriller

And all I could ponder was the future we had together

Not thinking about how this could begin my demise

Because the only thing on my mind was love, sex and Facebook

 

I could also remember the first time he instant message hello

And how my body went numb from head to toe

And how that one word began a new reality which only include him and me

Ah reality where we IM whole night

Ah reality where dirty texting was alright

Ah reality that was

 Completely free

Ah reality that only Facebook could provide me.

Your know people does say sex is between the ear and between the legs

Well boy, Facebook video chat prove that theory right.

 

Let’s not talk about the night he said I love you

I swear my body was going to split in two

Because those were the word that I was longing to hear

The words that I need to hear

So over joyed I missed the cue

Which fore tell only the true

But I didn’t care at the time

Because the only thing on my mind was love, sex and Facebook

 

I know I’ll never forget the first time we met in person

And how he seem like something I’ll never regret

Because he was most definitely the best

With a body that’s is hard for words to describe

I was so glad that he was mine

So when he asked that fateful question

All of are sudden I pick  up a stammer 

Yeeeeeeesssssss ……………..I’ll havvvvvvvve sex

 

Now this was the first time for me

Who better to take my virginity?

Than he!

He promised me that it would be

The best thing that could ever happen to we

Yes we cause he told me that is what lovers do

One is easily taken in by what one loves

So how could I say no

Because all that was on my mind was love, sex, and face book

 

The time was set,

The location had already been chosen

For once I didn’t have to wonder about my hair or what to wear.

Beause everything was in place

All that was to be done was the embrace

 

First we kissed

I was so nervous I almost missed

Then he placed his hands on my breast and mines on his chest

We felt each other’s heart beats

Synchronize,

I thought to myself

He most really love me

As the rhythmic motion of love make began

So I closed my eyes and I counted to three

 

Three week and three day

Three hundred notification were on my Facebook page

Three hour s is all it took for 3000 thousand to take a look

Three times I had to cry

Three people to whom I said goodbye

3 miles I had to run to meet my final destination

3 times I looked over the edge

3 times I wonder if this was right

3 minutes I gave myself to ponder

 So I wonder

Why do people lie about sex, to get sex, during sex, after sex about sex?

How could I allow myself to be fooled?

Is only three weeks I knew this fool

If I could go back in time

I would deactivate my profile

I’m not saying that Facebook cause this to happen

All it did was provided a forum

This destroyed my life complete

If I could, I would tell my sister to never make this mistake

But I’m dead

After all it’s my suicide note your’re reading

 

 

Comments

thisispoetryproject

You've touched on a very important topic and have truly been able to describe what can happen if the right tools fall into the wrong hands. This is a very powerful poem. Thank you for sharing this with Power Poetry. I really do hope that everyone, especially those who may be falling into this type of trap, has a chance to read and reflect upon your poem.

Despite the great message within your poem, there are a few techniques you can work on that will make this much more powerful.

If you were to maintain one rhythm throughout the entirety of your poem, the overall flow will definitely add to the permeating ability of your message Another seemingly miniscule tip is to watch your grammar and use of words in the correct or incorrect places. Although your message is clear, when the reader has to stop and think about what you actually meant to say their focus has been broken and must be regained.

Overall, this is a very touching poem because too many of our youth are falling into this trap, men and women alike.

terisa

Thank you so much for your feedback . I will take all of your criticism in to consideration. This piece was originally written in my native dialect so the grammar may seem out of place sometimes but I would try my best to improve. Thank you again. 

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